Knock, Knock

Well, this is my return to writing. Please give me a grace chapter or two to get myself back to a good writing ability, because I'm rusty.

This is the story of me, Austin Miles. Ordinary guy with an ordinary wife, ordinary kids, ordinary life. Then the shit hit the fan, and oh boy did it make a mess. Of course that is when my wife and kids were taken hostage, and my favorite pair of jeans were ruined. Surprisingly enough, when a gun is put to your head crapping and pissing your pants simultaneously is an easily achievable thing. All I was doing was doing the right thing. But they didn't care if I was doing my job right or not. They just wanted to hurt me, but they took it too far. The police wouldn't do anything about it though, they searched for a week, then just stopped. So I took matters into my own hands. I was bent on revenge. And revenge is what I got.

So this is the setup, just informing you all of what the story is about. The first chapter will be out soon. (And no, this did not take inspiration from Wanted, and he will not turn into some super assassin who can curve bullets and dive into cover in slow-motion while killing five guys with headshots. He will kill people though)

Pretty good Grenade. You likes the assassin stories, eh?

He's not really an assassin, he's just a guy who takes matters into his own hands after the police decide not to dive too deep into a scandal. He really is on his own (well, that's not entirely true). He's just an avenger

Firstly, that first paragraph is a cluster fuck of incoherency. Spread it out more, instead of just cramming it all in one paragraph. And try and avoid that hugely cliched "I'm a regular guy but then things got bad so now I have to fight". It's overused, and is cheesy. Instead, don't make the character out to be so cocky and aware of his action-hero-like status. Focus on him being a regular guy, but don't be so explicit about it. Declaring in the first few lines that he's a REGULAR GUY is a bad example of that.

Ziggy, once again. This is not even the prologue. It's info on the setting.

Thank you Gold, and frankly, I haven't seen one story here about a "regular guy". And it's called humor, not cockiness. And just because he's "taking matters into his own hands" doesn't show action-hero qualities, it shows the seeking of revenge because his family was taken away from him

Gold Spartan5 wrote:Ziggy, once again. This is not even the prologue. It's info on the setting.

I can still offer advice, for fucks sake.

When I say overused, I don't mean here, I mean across all platforms of media everywhere like movies, novels, tv shows, what not.

Ziggy wrote:

Gold Spartan5 wrote:Ziggy, once again. This is not even the prologue. It's info on the setting.

I can still offer advice, for fucks sake.

When I say overused, I don't mean here, I mean across all platforms of media everywhere like movies, novels, tv shows, what not.

Yeah, that's why I'm writing about it. Because it's not common for writing

Mr. Grenade wrote:

Ziggy wrote:

Gold Spartan5 wrote:Ziggy, once again. This is not even the prologue. It's info on the setting.

I can still offer advice, for fucks sake.

When I say overused, I don't mean here, I mean across all platforms of media everywhere like movies, novels, tv shows, what not.

Yeah, that's why I'm writing about it. Because it's not common for writing

No it's overused.... the regular guy thing. Ziggy is right... again, you just can't accept the fact he's right. If you listen to him you will eventually be better at this.