Untitled...for now

Th is a work in progress...please bare with me...I was on a Twilight high...and I was also told to continue my work...ok, here it is...

Chapter 1
Running. So exhelerating. So fun. So...scary. I never thought I would be running for my life, I guess this would be the perfect time for it though...only for the simple fact I was going to die. Dying seems so simple compared to living. Living is hard...dying is easy. As I continued to run from my preditor, I realized something. Something just as scary as my killer. I didn't head his breathing, his swift footsteps as they crunched on the soft, dead leaves of the woods. If everything else wasn't inconveniant, a dense fog had rolled in, distorting my eye sight. I could hear my hearbeat, faster and faster, the loud thump-ump, thump-ump could be heard from a mile away. I froze suddenly only to feel him behind me, his warm, sentuous breath was on my neck. He reatched out his long cold finger and stroked the nape of my neck from my ear to colarbone.
"Why are you running, my darling?"
He said in his usual sexy tone. I shuttered gently at his words and touch. I could just hear him smile as he felt every little movement of my neck twitching. I closed my eyes as my breathing quickened, my chest heaving up and down.
He chuckled gently and grabbedmy waist. He spun me around roughly and pressed my body into his. I tried to pull away but his grip was too strong. He gently rose my head up to meet his gaze. Tears were streaming down my face as he smiled gently.
"Shh...darling, don't cry."
He said as his lips met mine. He pulled back and I watched as his incisors grew to a point, longer than any of his other teeth. My eyes grew wide as I watched him lower his mouth to my neck. He scraped his teeth on my neck, causing me to shutter. He laughed again.
"Do it...please..."
I begged, I felt him smile. Just as he plunged his teeth into my neck, I wake up, screaming. I quickly sat up, sweat dripping off me, my breath coming in short spazzums. I looked around and calmed down.
"It was...just a dream..."
I said as I relaxed and layed back down. I soon felt something running down my neck, something warm. I slowily sat back up and I rubbed my neck. I feltfwo symetrical holes about the size of a binder hole. Coming out of those holes was blood. I sat there in shock as I realized that it wasn't a dream.



Dun dun DUN! LOL

Shudder, not shutter. Shutters are what camera's have.

Looks like a Twilight Fangirl's dream diary.

All...of...you...are...asses... :'(

Why can't you enjoy REAL imagination?

Don't take it so seriously. We're just messin. I'm sure Twilight fans would like it.

It needs a LOT of help in the grammar department, but otherwise it wasn't that bad. In fact, the idea itself doesn't necessarily suggest Twilight. Do you know how old the ideas of Vampires is? There's no "sparkly" references here, so it could be any kind of biter.

Really... and who's to say I don't get my sci-fi inspiration out of a John Ringo novel and barf it straight into my own original novels?

Nobody, that's who!

(ps... saw Twilight. Didn't much care for it, but the part where the hawt native american hunk took off his shirt was funny cos the whole theater whistled in admiration. )

-Etsharrin Hopsarrith

Etsharrin Hopsarrith wrote:It needs a LOT of help in the grammar department, but otherwise it wasn't that bad.

I was on my phone at the time since I have no internet at my house and thought, "Hey, I wanna type this up in here" so I did. And when I finally got on my laptop, I noticed a BUNCH of mistakes. So, I blame my phone for that one. Sorry guys!

I never said anything bad about it. I'm all for vampires drinking blood so long as they don't sparkle or take their shirt off for no other reason than to stare seriously into space while they do it.

Offensive Bias wrote:I never said anything bad about it. I'm all for vampires drinking blood so long as they don't sparkle or take their shirt off for no other reason than to stare seriously into space while they do it.

Hey, mine will never do that. I didn't copy Twilight one bit. I simply made a male vampire and a female human. How classic can you get?